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Is this part of a larger piece? It's hard to make sense of this. We get an overall impression but even after two tries it still leaves us a bit perplexed.
Also, we have a standing rule about gore in stories. There certainly is a lot of blood in this one. Pain, and dripping blood. Not really suitable for the inkwell.
On the other hand, you really do express yourself well. While the story is a little confusing, and a little too gory, it is also is very well written. Great style. Impressive use of the English language.
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No I was trying to write something more than a single story, the prompt led me to write the first phase of it,
which I am not sure, I will write further or not, but it got too lengthy and so I published whatever was there.
I'll make sure to keep this in mind for next time.
I'll remove it then,🤗