RE: The Intruder

This sounds like a terrible ordeal for the security guard. This a fun and suspenseful story as the consequences of his new job unravels. The opening first line is strong and immediately grabbed my attention:

Some jobs are made for certain people, then there are some people made for certain jobs.

I like the introspective feel of the narrator's voice. In the following sentence, I think you have it backwards:

The employee asks himself "Is this the right person for the job? and the employer wonders to himself "Is this the right job for me?"

Should it be the other way around?

The descriptions of the setting are vivid, and I'm glad you used multiple senses to do so.

A sharp muffled clank. The type that is made when a padlock has just been cut.

It's a fast-paced story with bursts of action. One thing I caught is in the following sentence:

Scars slashed across it with no eyebrows and flat nose. He looked like Voldemort if Voldemort wrestled with a bear.

I know who this Harry Potter character is, but some of your readers may not be familiar with He-Who-Shall-Not-Be-Named, so it might be good to provide more context for this literary reference without ruining the humour. It's challenging!

I felt that the story kept a good pace with the action until the bitter end. I hope he managed extricate himself from the situation, but it looks like it didn't end well. 😣